simple - nel

livecollective · Post by **livecollective** » Fri Dec 28, 2007 11:38 pm

hmmm well here is a shortened version of it, you get the idea, i would love some feedback... thanks in advance

http://www.livecollective.com/nel.mp3

Alex Biron · Post by **Alex Biron** » Sat Dec 29, 2007 5:35 am

Ok here goes. I'm going to comment as I listen. So I've started and I'm thinking wait a bit before the first drop. This seems like a draft so no problem. I like the vocal maybe make it a little louder. The beepy melody is a bit annoying, you should change it. Great bassline and I like the reverby note. The rolling poolball sounds work well. There is one snare like sound that you put reverb on that I think you should use more, it's nice. I'm getting a little bored now. Oh ok here comes a breakdown good timing. Wait longer before adding the beat. Nice snare. The melody is growing on me. Nice reverb. Great drop although I've decided that that one note with reverb isn't working. It just seems to be clashing with everything else. I'm going to stop now because I think I get the idea.

Overall. The track needs to be fine tuned and some of the notes need to be fixed. However, I love the vocal and the melody. Great work!

Hope some of this has helped!

livecollective · Post by **livecollective** » Sat Dec 29, 2007 12:44 pm

a bit i guess, the "melody" is all just a maybe at this point...

thanks for listening....sorry to hear you got bored, after listening to yer songs, i thought this would be straight up your alley.

alexx.wolfe · Post by **alexx.wolfe** » Sat Dec 29, 2007 12:44 pm

dont like the kick...
the vocal is amazing!
panning is beautifull.
and yes the 'first drop' is taking a lot of time to come.
percussion is good.
But really in love with the vocal.
Try to reorganize the track. you got something here but got to have another struture I think.

alexx.wolfe · Post by **alexx.wolfe** » Sat Dec 29, 2007 12:45 pm

the vocal is amazing!!!! : D

livecollective · Post by **livecollective** » Sat Dec 29, 2007 6:08 pm

definately a re-structure, i dont like that melody personally, the kick was the new toy i was fiddling with... I kinda like it, although its a bit heavy...

a re-organization is in the works!

spur · Post by **spur** » Sun Dec 30, 2007 3:01 pm

nice reverb...is there anybody out there ?

indeed, that vocal sample is very cool !

alexx.wolfe · Post by **alexx.wolfe** » Sun Dec 30, 2007 6:24 pm

where did you find this vocal? I simply love it (:

and the work that you did with it...amazing!