hmm... there are some good things, and some others that are less good.
The mix in general could be better. I'll try to list the moments that sound bizarre.
The intro is promising. The hihats are still quite loud but why not! They may sound unpleasant if listened loud, i don't know, i can only use my HD-202 headphones (aka The Infidel) at the moment.
After the mini break at 1'17", you have 2 measures of synth and 2 measures transposed down. The first ones are quite OK (but I prefer the pattern in the intro), the last ones are awful and cheesy. I' afraid I start to freak when I hear something that tries to be melodic :-/
I do much prefer when the synth sound is more filtered (eg in the intro) than when it's brighter. I think you should try beefing up the echo (louder? less decay? i don't know!)
I do really like the bass !
And also the "dong" around 2'55"
the little break just before 3'20" is OK except for the snare, maybe because it's too dry.
Hmm that bass, sweet!
The part after 3'20" if really good, simple, nice sounds. I like how the synth gets very loud. Nice work on the volume. You could play with the echo on the synth for a dub feeling, and make this part longer. IMHO the break at 4'32" ruins the ambiance that you were developing.
The very last part (bass, kick, snare, and some clicks) is excellent too.
To summarize, i like the simplest parts (the intro, the end, and the part between 3'20" and 4'32", and the little break with tons of delay at 1'17" that could be even crazier with more fx). Destroy the melodies!
Don't think your track will be less boring if you multiply the elements, keep the best patterns, the best sounds and trash the rest.
I've made quite a lot of comments on your track, i hope you won't be discouraged. At least, the second version is much better than the first one
And it's only my opinion...
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